Once upon a time, there was a Princess called Snow Black. She had everything that she wanted as her father, the King, gave in to her every need. However she couldn’t go out because she and others saw herself as ugly as a toad. She had been contemplating for days about what to do and finally on her 18th birthday she knew exactly what she wanted so she rushed to her father den.
She reached her fathers den, and with both hands uncontrollably pounded on the door with excitement, “Father I need to talk to you NOW!!”
“Daughter, what is it? Come in.”
“Daddy, I am so ugly and disgusting, so I have decided that you are going to pay for my plastic surgery.”
“Darling, don’t you think that is a bit much. You’re still quite young…”
Before the King could finish “Daddy don’t you love me?” the princess started weeping. “If you do, you would allow me to do this, and if you don’t I will hate you FOREVER!!”
The king was so saddened but his daughter, but he couldn't refuse his lovely child’s request, as she was his only child.
She was ready to get her beautiful complexion and forget her old one that she burnt all the photos of herself and forced everyone to keep her secret, even the king.
The plastic surgery was a painful recovery but it was worth it in her eyes as a few months later, she was able to take the bandages off and see her new face. She had become one of the most beautiful Princesses in the world, and finally she was living a happy life. When word of mouth got around, she had been swamped by love letters and proposals from Princes from all over the world.
One fine day, the King married a very pretty, young woman. The Princess thought she was weird as she had this very strange shaped mirror with her and every time when Snow Black passed her step mother’s room, she could hear something.
One time, Snow Black passed her step mother’s room again, and heard this sound again. Snow Black’s curiosity increased so much she couldn’t help but go closer to the door.
“Mirror, mirror on the wall, WHO’S THE FAIREST OF THEM ALL??” the step mother asked.
Surprisingly, the mirror answered. “Queen, you are the fairest. But Snow Black is fairer than you. Even though she had plastic surgery...”
“WHAT?” she shrieked “My step-daughter had had plastic surgery?”
When Snow Black heard the sounds coming from her step mother’s room she started to worry. If she didn’t do something about this now, someone could discover her secret and this meant she would no longer be known as being ‘naturally beautiful.’ It would be too hard for her to live like that and eventually she plotted a plan to kill her step mother.
The next day, Snow Black disguised herself as an old woman. She prepared a basket of poisonous strawberries and waited for her step mother to come out for her daily walk.
When her step mother emerged from the castle, Snow Black said; “Your majesty, How are you today? I picked some delicious strawberries from our farm this morning. They are very fresh and sweet.”
The Queen replied, “Thank you very much. They look delicious!”
After the queen received the strawberries, she returned to the castle. That night the King discovered the Queen’s cold, lifeless body. He was so distraught that he couldn’t even throw any of his beloved’s personal belongs away, not even her mirror. The next day, Snow Black went to her step mother’s room and took the mirror.
A few weeks after the Queen died, a maid was cleaning the outside of Snow Black’s room and could hear a strange conversation coming from inside.
She went closer to the room. “Mirror, mirror on the wall, WHOS THE FAIREST OF THEM ALL??”
The mirror answered “OF COURSE, YOU ARE SNOW BLACK PRINCESS. YOU ARE THE FAIREST.”
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*I was think of putting the stories about the dwarves but no idea where to put.
but thanks people those who gave me ideas!!!^-^ I have to expand anyway... how is it??
Hey,SeungEun.
ReplyDeleteI pretty enjoyed your Snow Black!
It's such a good idea that SnowBlack had plastic surgery~
What I liked the best part is that queen knew Snowblack had plastic surgery +o+//
Um... for putting dwarves... what about dwarves did the plastic surgery for SnowBlack?
Just..;;; yeh~
I think you don't actually need to put them in the story..
hey,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed that.
I really like the way you have drawn the parrells between the true snow white and snow black. such as the apples-starwberries.
Dont want to sound too picky but their is a few language mistakes such as maybe instead of "YOU ARE FULL FAIR.” perhaps " you are the fairest" fits better?
Apart from that i really enjoyed the story. I dont think the dwarves are neccseary i think the story is fine without them.
hope that helps.
Hi
ReplyDeleteI really liked it, especially your idea about the plastic surgery. I thought that idea was really quirky. It brought a smile to my face. I like the way you reversed the story so that everything was kind of opposite, like Snow White to Snow Black, how she is not naturally beautiful and how the stepmother eats something poisonous,etc. Good work! I think it is good in that this recurring theme is continued throughout the whole fanfic. I agree with Jasmine in that you probably don't need to include the dwarves. How would you include the dwarves but still stick to your 'opposites' idea? I don't really remember the story of Snow White all that well but from what I can remember the seven dwarves take Snow White in and care for her. Am I right? You could possibly change it so that the dwarves take the stepmother in or something along those lines if you wanted to include the dwarves but this is only a possible idea.
Hope that helps.
Thank you guys! I like your idea irene! about dwarves did the plastic surgery for snow white lol nice one- and thank you Jasmine~ the major problem for me was the grammer and vocab. Thanx I changed the "you are full fair" part for my final. :) and Natalie- at the end of my final, there is a link for my blogger. and you can find links for the stories of original snow white! have a look~:). Thank you guys~
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