Hey Guys.
This is just a start at the moment it probably wont make much sense i know this isnt a well known movie either but once i get more posted it hopefully will make sense. If you could give me some advice, feedback etc that would be great. Cheers
“Kel, I love you”. With that Lane turned and walked swiftly towards the arch marked ‘competitors only’. Kelly remained where she was, sitting on the steel race fence watching and thinking. Her eyes remained on Lane as her fingers played with her crucifix, a habit, she found herself doing whenever she thought of him.
‘Lord I am a lucky woman. ‘Kelly thought to herself as she recalled not long forgotten memories. The old weathered cowboy’s wives once warned her ‘to catch the cowboy is the easy part, but to keep the cowboy is what proves to be difficult. They are free, there aren’t any women, flesh or blood to hold them back, it’s just them and that damn old rodeo!’ Kelly wasn’t complaining though, it had been a long and tedious road, only now were things just right.
Lane stopped to offer advice to a young cowboy swinging all over a practice barrel. With a few corrections, a pat on the back and gruff “cowboy up” Lane was on his way as Kelly still watching him, swelled with joy.
Things had been rough these past six months. Only a week ago Lane had been named 1987 PRCA World Champion bull rider.
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Hey Jasmine, I think it made perfect sense. I like how you've described it all in that we know what each charcter is up to instead of trying to keep it in the back of your mind who are they. With the mystery of why the past 6 months are rough, that keeps the anticipation of whats the past involved and good use of the quote about the cowboys wives story. Can't wait to keep reading the rest of it.
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Hi, Jasmine. I just read through your first draft. As you described clearly,I think you are in right direction. I just wondering this part is only for the charcter introduction or backgroud of your stroy?
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Irene ^^
Hey Jasmine. I think it is sounding really good so far. It is sounding really descriptive and I can't wait to read more when you are finished. You wrote in an earlier post that you were going to try to portray more of the true story as Lane Frost was criticized for not portraying some of the relationships as they actually were in real life. I was just wondering if you were going to put your own spin on things by including situations and events in your fanfic that you yourself have made up but include how you feel the characters would have reacted in real life in order to correctly portray the story . . . Or whether you were going to include events that really happened and how they actually reacted, through your research. Hope that makes sense.
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Natalie,
ReplyDeleteThanks for the comment. My original aim was to emphasize the truth to Lanes relationship to his father but instead i have chosen to focus the storyline on his relationship with his wife which is mostly fictional. I still intend to put a quote in it to show the truth to his father's pride. My own little spin will be Kellies pregnancyn which is in no way truth Lane died before they could start a family.so yes im going to add my own spin but make there reactions true to there character and how they would have reacted in real life.
Does that answer your Questions. Thank you